It's still there in a new short guide, cf this extract...
Nail the summary
This is a single sentence that sells the story on the website’s front page. It should expand on the headline; can reflect the story’s intro; and should encapsulate what the story is about.
The summary should ideally have no clauses and stick to the present or future tense. It should also be self-contained so that it can transfer easily for use on other BBC outlets.
Headline: “Burglary at Ozzy Osbourne’s home”
Summary: “A large amount of jewellery is stolen from the rock star Ozzy Osbourne’s mansion while he and his wife are sleeping.”
I would prefer "A large amount of jewellery has been stolen from Ozzy Osborne's mansion while he and his wife were asleep". Though, frankly, I'd prefer it even more if it avoided the vague, and the passive, and said "Burglars have stolen jewellery from Ozzy Osborne's house, while he and his wife were sleeping there". And even more if you didn't mention it at all.
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